In 1957, the British empire granted independence to Ghana, formerly known as the Gold Coast, after being pushed away by the movements of the Ghanaian people led by Kwame Nkrumah, who later became the first Prime Minister and President of Ghana. (reword and give more background)
Nkrumah governed the state of Ghana with his Pan-Africanist views. Because of his strong perspectives, he focused more on uniting the African states by travelling to each country and having meetings with its leaders promoting his idea of the "United States of Africa".
Meanwhile, Ghana, as a self-governed state, has showed development through the new infrastructures created like the new highway(insert specific example here). Most of Ghana's development was financed by foreign countries like the US and Britain (not sure what else...check later).
Even if Nkrumah was doing a good job on uniting Africa and had improved Ghana, many were doubtful about his ways. People started to question his projects. (give more details and reword)
Then, the time came when the opposition of Nkrumah's government pursued with their plan of removing Nkrumah from his office. A military coup, led by General (something) Ankrah and (insert another name here), occurred in the morning of (insert specific date here) while Nkrumah was off to (insert destination) for a peace-making meeting.
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Nkrumah believes that the US government might have something to do with the coup just like his belief that the US was also involved in the Congo Crisis (read more about this). The coup leaders asked helped from the US president, about governing their country after the coup. It was said that General Ankrah was preferred by the US to be Ghana's next leader.
I believe that the people of Ghana was a powerful force until some of them thought of reforming the government. The people's divided views made them weak. General Ankrah (and his buddies) are...
basically, it makes sense and your arguement is in your last paragraph. you do have a lots of evidence to prove your arguement, but there are more details that you have to find it out. i feel interested to read more in the last paragraph....
ReplyDeleteThis a very interesting topic that you have here. Somehow, the tiny lack of sources and precise names, does not bother. (because, hey, you're gonna edit this later)The structure by itself is nice, there's a lot of causes and consequences connection as well as there is also a strong argument. So far, I wish you the best of luck, because you're gonna make it. For sure.
ReplyDeleteGreat structure and very interesting! It made me curious about why the people didn't want Nkrumah to govern them and what was the US's involvement? I really want to know why you feel the way you do about Ghana and it's gov't (as stated in the last paragraph), and I can't wait to read the rest of it...
ReplyDeleteHi - I agree with the other commenters that you have a good start here - right now your main players in the power analysis are individuals - think more about what groups those individuals might represent. When you say 'the people' were suspicious of them, and 'the people' might have been powerful, use the sources to figure out which groups of 'the people' you're talking about.
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